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6.12: Revising a Thesis Statement
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Your thesis statement will probably change as you write so that it reflects exactly what you discuss in your paper. Remember, you will begin with a working thesis statement, an indefinite statement that you make about your topic early in the writing process.
Working thesis statements will become stronger as you gather information and form new opinions and reasons for those opinions. Revisions will help you strengthen your thesis so that it matches what you have expressed in the body of your paper. See Table 6.4 for ways to remove irrelevant parts and revise your thesis.
Table 6.4: Revising a thesis
Student Tip
Ask Questions about Your Thesis Statement
The best way to revise your thesis statement is to ask questions about it and then examine the answers to those questions. By challenging your own ideas and forming definite reasons for those ideas, you can move toward a more precise point of view, which you can then incorporate into your thesis statement.
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Some working thesis statements are provided below. Use the steps you have just learned to revise the working thesis to strengthen the statement.
- Working Thesis: Today’s university students have too much stress in their life.
- Working Thesis: Children are not exercising enough.
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6.12.9: Argumentative Thesis Statements
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- Recognize an arguable thesis
Below are some of the key features of an argumentative thesis statement.
An argumentative thesis is . . .
An argumentative thesis must make a claim about which reasonable people can disagree. Statements of fact or areas of general agreement cannot be argumentative theses because few people disagree about them.
Junk food is bad for your health is not a debatable thesis. Most people would agree that junk food is bad for your health.
Because junk food is bad for your health, the size of sodas offered at fast-food restaurants should be regulated by the federal government is a debatable thesis. Reasonable people could agree or disagree with the statement.
An argumentative thesis takes a position, asserting the writer’s stance. Questions, vague statements, or quotations from others are not argumentative theses because they do not assert the writer’s viewpoint.
Federal immigration law is a tough issue about which many people disagree is not an arguable thesis because it does not assert a position.
Federal immigration enforcement law needs to be overhauled because it puts undue constraints on state and local police is an argumentative thesis because it asserts a position that immigration enforcement law needs to be changed.
An argumentative thesis must make a claim that is logical and possible. Claims that are outrageous or impossible are not argumentative theses.
City council members stink and should be thrown in jail is not an argumentative thesis. City council members’ ineffectiveness is not a reason to send them to jail.
City council members should be term limited to prevent one group or party from maintaining control indefinitely is an arguable thesis because term limits are possible, and shared political control is a reasonable goal.
Evidence Based
An argumentative thesis must be able to be supported by evidence. Claims that presuppose value systems, morals, or religious beliefs cannot be supported with evidence and therefore are not argumentative theses.
Individuals convicted of murder will go to hell when they die is not an argumentative thesis because its support rests on religious beliefs or values rather than evidence.
Rehabilitation programs for individuals serving life sentences should be funded because these programs reduce violence within prisons is an argumentative thesis because evidence such as case studies and statistics can be used to support it.
An argumentative thesis must be focused and narrow. A focused, narrow claim is clearer, more able to be supported with evidence, and more persuasive than a broad, general claim.
The federal government should overhaul the U.S. tax code is not an effective argumentative thesis because it is too general (What part of the government? Which tax codes? What sections of those tax codes?) and would require an overwhelming amount of evidence to be fully supported.
The U.S. House of Representative should vote to repeal the federal estate tax because the revenue generated by that tax is negligible is an effective argumentative thesis because it identifies a specific actor and action and can be fully supported with evidence about the amount of revenue the estate tax generates.
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· Properly reasserts the thesis without sounding repetitive. · Summarizes the main points. 11-9 points · Reasserts the thesis without sounding repetitive. · Lists out the main points. 8-0 points · Copy/pastes the thesis or restates the thesis in a repetitive way. · Copy/pastes the main points.
6.06 Thesis Statement By: Jasmyne Mehrten Wordsworth and Muir express their deep connection and love with nature using similes and hyperboles to show the reader how much nature has effected their life.
Lesson 06.06 Assessment Thesis statement views on nature Thesis Statement: The differences between John and William. John and William view nature as a beautiful thing. They see nature as something we should enjoy, something memorable. They see nature as something we should pay
View Notes - 6.06 Thesis statement from ENGLISH 101 at Florida Virtual High School. writing prompt. Writing Prompt How have these two authors expressed their relationships with nature? After reading
A thesis statement is often one sentence long, and it states your point of view. The thesis statement is not the topic of the piece of writing but rather what you have to say about that topic and what is important to tell readers. Table 5.1 "Topics and Thesis Statements" compares topics and thesis statements. Table 5.1 Topics and Thesis ...
Think of the thesis as the mid-point of an hourglass. You develop ideas for writing and prewriting, using various strategies, until a main idea or assertion emerges. This main idea or assertion becomes your point to prove—your working thesis sentence. Once you have a working thesis sentence with your main idea, you can then develop more ...
· The essay has a strong thesis statement. 11-9 points · The essay has a mediocre hook. · The essay attempts to bridge information. · The essay has a somewhat strong thesis statement. 8-0 points · The essay has a poor or no hook. · The essay has poor or no bridging information. · The essay has a poor or no thesis statement.
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Recognize an argumentative thesis. Evaluate an argumentative thesis. In the practice exercises below, you will use the information you learned in the previous reading to help you recognize and evaluate argumentative thesis statements. Keep in mind that a sound argumentative thesis should be debatable, assertive, reasonable, evidence based, and ...
6.06 Thesis Statement Revision To download this file, click: " File " → " Download As " → Choose your file format, & SAVE to your English 1 folder that you have created. Instructions: Write a basic thesis statement and a revised thesis statement in response to the writing prompt. Writing Prompt How have these two authors expressed their relationships with nature?
Figure 6.5: Pitfalls in thesis statements. Student Tip. Use of the First Person Perspective in a Thesis Statement. Even in a personal essay that allows the use of the first person perspective, your thesis should not contain phrases such as in "my opinion" or "I believe.". These statements reduce your credibility and weaken your argument.
Every type of non-fiction writing - from a short essay to a 10-page term paper to a lengthy thesis or dissertation- needs a controlling idea as a "spine" that holds the paper together (see Figure 6.6). Look at Table 6.3: Topics and Thesis Statements for a comparison of topics and thesis statements.
Sharing Your Work Rubric On Target Almost There Needs Improvement Introduction Paragraph (15 points) 15-12 points · The essay has an engaging hook. · The essay has proper bridging information. · The essay has a strong thesis statement. 11-9 points · The essay has a mediocre hook. · The essay attempts to bridge information. · The essay has a somewhat strong thesis statement.
English. Sharing Your Work Assessment Step 1: Following the lesson, revise your rough draft looking at word choice, syntax, flow, and transitions. Then edit your paper for grammar, punctuation, subject-verb agreement, among others to create your final, polished copy. Step 2: Copy and paste these questions on their own page at the end of your ...
What you'll learn to do: evaluate argumentative thesis statements. An academic argument asserts a claim and supports that claim with evidence. The goal of an argument is to convince readers that the writer's position is reasonable, valid, and worthy of consideration. Therefore, an argumentative thesis statement needs to be not only clear ...
6.9: Elements of a Thesis Statement. When writing an essay, you must focus on a main idea. This idea will stem from a topic you have chosen or been assigned or from a question your instructor has asked. It is not enough merely to discuss a general topic or answer with a yes or no: you will need to form an opinion and then articulate it into a ...
The point is a thesis is a point. Theses are not statements of facts, simple questions, or summaries of events. They are positions that you as the writer take on and "defend" with evidence, logic, observations, and the other tools of discourse. Most kinds of writing—and particularly academic writing—have a thesis, directly stated or ...
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Table 6.4: Revising a thesis. Step. Revision. Impact. Identify and replace all nonspecific words, such as people, everything, society, or life, with more precise words to reduce any vagueness. Working thesis: University students have to work hard to succeed in school. Revised thesis: Nursing students must have discipline and persistence to ...
In writing the introductory paragraph, the challenge may vary from person to person. However, one common challenge is capturing the attention of the reader and providing a clear thesis statement. It can be difficult to find the right words or structure to make a strong first impression and clearly state the main point of your essay.
An argumentative thesis must make a claim about which reasonable people can disagree. Statements of fact or areas of general agreement cannot be argumentative theses because few people disagree about them. Example. Junk food is bad for your health is not a debatable thesis. Most people would agree that junk food is bad for your health.
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View 6.06 Thesis Statement - English.docx from LA 02.08 at Columbia Virtual Academy. Thesis Statement Revision—Handout Instructions: Write a basic thesis statement and a revised thesis statement ... Copy_of_6.06_Thesis_Statement_Revision.docx. Solutions Available. Florida Virtual School. ENGLISH MISC. Copy of yourNameELA30-13.2 (1).docx ...